Here I am in the middle of a city, 350 miles far away from our farmhouse.
Do you want to know why we move last week? Dad lost his
job and as Mom explained, “He was lucky to find other one.”
His new job meant I had to say goodbye to my classmate,
my school, or just everything else I love in the world.
To make matters bad, now I have to share a room with
my younger sister, Maggie. Tomorrow is first day of school.
I am awfully tiring, but I know I will never fall asleep.
Good night and remember you, dear diary, is my only souvenir from my past life and my only friend.
正文的
1.far去掉(因為far已經被 350 miles代替了)
2.move→moved(由last week可知,謂動應用過去式)
3.other→another(這兒是指"另壹個,又壹個",應該用another;而other指的是"別的,其他的")
4.classmate→classmates(同學不止壹個,故用復數)
5.or→and(這兒表示的是並列關系,而不是選擇關系,故用and)
6.bad→worse(to make matters worse是固定短語,"更糟糕的是")
:7.在first前加上my/the(指"我"上學的第壹天,或開學的第壹天,故必須在first前加上my或the)
:8.tiring→tired(指人"感到累的"用tired;而tiring指物"累人的,令人勞累的")
9.sleep→asleep(形容詞作表語,fall asleep入睡,睡著)
:10.is→are (因為 you, dear diary, is my only souvenir .... friend是作remember 的賓語從句,其主語是you;而dear diary是you的同位語;my only souvenir是表語. 語法規則中,只要求"主謂壹致" , 不要求"同謂壹致"或"表謂壹致".因此,此句的be動詞應跟主語you相壹致,用are.)